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Business Writing Tips e-newsletter : December 2009

Happy Holidays! I wish you a peaceful, joyous and healthy holiday season.

Buzz off: play it straight

Drop the buzzwords and write in straightforward language

Feel that buzz

I'd like some facetime with you so we can have a dialogue about strategies to secure more bandwidth from the service department.

Straightforward

I'd like to meet with you to discuss strategies to increase productivity from the service department.

Write with a consistent structure

Inconsistent

In the third quarter, expenses rose 25% while profits have dropped 10%.

Consistent

In the third quarter, expenses rose 25% while profits dropped 10% (deleting "have").

Be clear about what you're describing.

Confusing

Amy has met with Marina twice to help resolve her difficulties interpreting audit reports. (It's unclear who had difficulties.)

Clear

To resolve Amy's problems interpreting audit reports, Marina has met with her twice.

NNJ-ASTD taps Jack as president

Jack was named the 2010 president of the northern New Jersey chapter of the American Society for Training and Development ( www.nnjastd.org ), an association of workplace learning professionals.